Fix This: April correction

The example for April is passive.  The verbs “was” and “were” are inactive.  There is also a want to be specific.  Show the kind of rock and trees.  The better the detail, the more vivid the description.  Look to your verbs.

The hillside plunged in a layer of loose shale.  On the valley floor, sumac and maple fluttered red and gold in the autumn wind.

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