Fix this: January correction

This is an example of a story started, then stopped.  Description should blend with the story rather than simply being told.  This character is in a dangerous situation.  It is unreal to think that he would stop to categorize his place of refuge.  More bullets could whiz.  The tank could rumble.  Little figurines could fall or shatter into pieces.  Tapestries could fly in crazy colors.  Again, the keyword is show, don’t tell.

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